Samples from “Virtues” Essays
  Student Writing

This is a clumsy sentence: Fellow players have been telling me for years that I suck at football and you want to know what I think about those people is that they are scared, jealous and feel threatened by me and you what I’m not playing to take others positions I’m playing because I love this game and know that I don’t suck.

This would be better: Fellow players have been telling me for years that I suck at football. Do you know what I think about that? I think those people are scared or jealous or feel threatened by me. I’m not playing for their benefit. I’m playing because I love this game. I don’t believe that I do suck.

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If we all had a little more patience with things and people then maybe we wouldn’t get so upset over things so easily. I remember sitting in class when I was younger and the person sitting a few desks down from me kept interrupting the teacher again and again. I wanted very badly to just yell at him and tell him to stop, and wondered why the teacher would be so patient with them. The person kept interrupting the teacher till class got over and it was time to leave. When I left class I remember being very annoyed with how that person was acting, so after class I asked someone why the teacher was being so patient with the person instead of getting upset with them and sending them to the office. The person I asked told me that the person who had been interrupting the teacher had a slower learning ability then the rest of us. After hearing this I was upset with myself for feeling so angry with that person.

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It is simple, if a person doesn’t have determination they won’t get far in life.

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It is always smart to laugh at yourself more then others, because

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Eating right, exercise, sleep and stress relief are some of the things that will help to keep you healthy. You can work out by going on runs or walks, or even play an active game.

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If someone does not have a good sense of humor than that person is either a really boring person

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For instance this summer I was determined to get a job and work the whole summer, and I did. I’m not saying that it was hard, but I am saying that there were many times this summer that i just wanted to take a day off or just not show up. But I was determined to do my best and it has payed off, because when it came to the time that they started to lay people off where I work my name wasn’t on the list.

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Also determination has helped me alot with school work.

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I thought that this was bologna at first, but after watching the video I thought hey lets give it a shot.

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someone who takes things to literally.

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Next thing I knew me and my friend were in a serious argument.

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Tension wouldn’t of built up between us and that argument would of never happened.

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I am a very self sufficent person in everyday tasks. during school hours I make sure I go above and beyond to acheive the best grade I can recieve, while I also do my own laundry, dishes and cook.